Your writing could use some work.
I can only understand
about half of the characters you compose
and the others can easily be confused
with one another.
It’s careless, really.
A lack of effort.
I’m sure practice and experience
will make your writing clearer
easier to comprehend
but as it stands
Your writing seems really immature
like you don’t know what you’re doing.

Again,
you can fix this.
You can improve,
make your movements more discernible
and everything will become
much easier to take in.
You have the ability
to work it
til your fingers bleed
and you get the right rhythm
and your handwriting becomes something
we are all capable of reading
and enjoying.

Get to work.